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His "cognitive decline" is the thing that jumps in everybody's face when listening to him talk, 5 minutes are all that is needed. This most obvious thing can not be mentioned in polite society, so is totally ignored - but you have to bend your mind to ignore it, it was already very obvious on his campaign. I will rework the lede now and move stuff elsewhere to give this fact much more focus. -- [[User:Sunvalley|Sunvalley]] ([[User talk:Sunvalley|talk]]) 19:57, 29 August 2022 (UTC) | His "cognitive decline" is the thing that jumps in everybody's face when listening to him talk, 5 minutes are all that is needed. This most obvious thing can not be mentioned in polite society, so is totally ignored - but you have to bend your mind to ignore it, it was already very obvious on his campaign. I will rework the lede now and move stuff elsewhere to give this fact much more focus. -- [[User:Sunvalley|Sunvalley]] ([[User talk:Sunvalley|talk]]) 19:57, 29 August 2022 (UTC) | ||
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Yes, go ahead and remove it. I think most occurrences of the passive should either be turned into actives, with an identified subject and a reference, or removed. Constructions like "many people believe", "some people say" etc. generally should be referenced or removed. -- [[User:Robin|Robin]] ([[User talk:Robin|talk]]) 12:20, 31 August 2022 (UTC) | Yes, go ahead and remove it. I think most occurrences of the passive should either be turned into actives, with an identified subject and a reference, or removed. Constructions like "many people believe", "some people say" etc. generally should be referenced or removed. -- [[User:Robin|Robin]] ([[User talk:Robin|talk]]) 12:20, 31 August 2022 (UTC) | ||
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| + | I am removing the following: "As overall corruption in the American political system has caused him as to be labelled as “best option“ making his presidency happen," (as I did the initial wording probably ok to do so) - I am not sure here, there's Republican and there's Democrat, and next to nothing in between. To the Democrat side anything was better than Trump, so you could say that this was the message transmitted to them in essence, but to the Republ. this does not apply. There was massive ballot fraud and very forceful, concentrated suppression of evidence of everything that was going on. However, it does not need to be mentioned in the lede, probably better to invest time in the 2020 election. -- [[User:Sunvalley|Sunvalley]] ([[User talk:Sunvalley|talk]]) 22:00, 23 September 2022 (UTC) | ||
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His "cognitive decline" is the thing that jumps in everybody's face when listening to him talk, 5 minutes are all that is needed. This most obvious thing can not be mentioned in polite society, so is totally ignored - but you have to bend your mind to ignore it, it was already very obvious on his campaign. I will rework the lede now and move stuff elsewhere to give this fact much more focus. -- Sunvalley (talk) 19:57, 29 August 2022 (UTC)
From current |description= -> "Although not on the list, is accused of being a client of Epstein through or with Deborah Palfrey." that must be Jessica Collins, please let us remove that mention. -- Sunvalley (talk) 23:01, 29 August 2022 (UTC)
Passive always tends to be a bad sign
Yes, go ahead and remove it. I think most occurrences of the passive should either be turned into actives, with an identified subject and a reference, or removed. Constructions like "many people believe", "some people say" etc. generally should be referenced or removed. -- Robin (talk) 12:20, 31 August 2022 (UTC)
A better lede
I am removing the following: "As overall corruption in the American political system has caused him as to be labelled as “best option“ making his presidency happen," (as I did the initial wording probably ok to do so) - I am not sure here, there's Republican and there's Democrat, and next to nothing in between. To the Democrat side anything was better than Trump, so you could say that this was the message transmitted to them in essence, but to the Republ. this does not apply. There was massive ballot fraud and very forceful, concentrated suppression of evidence of everything that was going on. However, it does not need to be mentioned in the lede, probably better to invest time in the 2020 election. -- Sunvalley (talk) 22:00, 23 September 2022 (UTC)
